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Another Uzumaki?

Discussion in 'Naruto Fanworks' started by Alaris, Dec 2, 2005.

  1. Alaris New Member

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    Well, I got this idea from the Leafninja forums, as somone wrote a horrible fan fiction about Naruto having a brother. I decided to write one of my own. This story is based only days after Naruto's arrival back from his training with Jiraiya. I decided to change this as it will affect chapter 2 greatly

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    All of it moved to here. I got chapters 3 and 4 up, and 5 and 6 coming as a double feature concerning Sasuke's escape from the sound village. Enjoy!
     
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  2. makeoutparadise I will have my revenge

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    :godaime Okay First let me begin by saying,THAT WAS THE BEST KICK ASS STORY IN ALL OF NARUTO FANFIC!!! YOU SHOULD MAIL THAT TO THE bIG M.K. himself!! that way it could become part of the manga.
     
  3. Mangekyou Kyuubi born... to hate

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    pretty nice, i want more ^^
     
  4. ~ Masamune ~ Old Man Masa

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    I second that^^
     
  5. Sakura Active Member

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    ditto. nice chapter. will you hurry up with the other chapters?
     
  6. Alaris New Member

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    I'm sorry about not getting on with chapter 2 of this fan fic. No one seemed interested as i posted in many weeks ago and got no responses. I posted it on several other forums and it only fell back in the board. I will start working on Chapter 2 as soon as i get home from school. I guess you guys do like it, you just haven't had the time to post about it. Now I just have to think up something for chapter 2, lol. I did have it planned out, or at least part of it, but its not as easy as it looks. I'll base it off my idea i had before, and I'll have chapter 2 done as soon as i can.
     
  7. darthvader101 Hi my name is Glen

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    :laugh :laugh This is the best fan fic that I ever read.:amazed :amazed
     
  8. mr_yenz Lavender Raine

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    What they all said ^^
     
  9. Alaris New Member

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    Alright, Chapter 2 is finally up. I haven't had much time and i have a huge writers block in thinking up ideas for this. Please note i changed the timeline to after the timeskip, as it will affect the second chapter. Enjoy!
     
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  10. Zhero BAN-KAI!!!!!!

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    really good fanfic...i like this alot
     
  11. InEviTabLe.SiN I like..food?

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    I liked that FanFic. And I rarely like things. :notrust
     
  12. PROTESTtheHERO lOST ON THE ROAD OF LIFE

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    when's the next chapter comin up
     
  13. Kurairu Lords of Insufficient Light

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    Meh, I hate fanfics D=

    EDIT: I read it and I disagree with everyone here. I don't much care for the plot, nor the idea. Despite that, I find it to be well written. You should try writing something other than Manga stories =P
    o.o; and what's with all the newbs here? Newbs meaning less than 100 posts.
     
  14. Alaris New Member

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    Alright, sorry for the long wait, but i didn't think anyone cared anymore. Chapters 3 and 4 are up at the link provided in the spoiler tag in my first post. I decided to move it all to FanFiction.net. Enjoy!
     
  15. Zhero BAN-KAI!!!!!!

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    I jus read chapters 3 and 4, and they are good
     
  16. sasuke_limays I want to be HOKAGE!!!!!

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    can someone give me a free. cd of naruto...........
     
  17. Alaris New Member

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    New Chapters!

    Alright, finally, new chapters! Chapter's 5 and 6 are now up as a Double Feature revealing the month prior to Sasuke arriving in Konoha. First Post, spoiler tag and it will link ya. Enjoy!
     
  18. maxsbro Solituded has its rewards

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    im working on one but its taking me a while
     
  19. White Abyss WTF is this?!

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    Grrrrrr.

    Hey! I've got alot of posts on the FC's!!!! but they don't count posts cuz of spamming fools like you! if ya don't like fanfics, then get outta the fanfics area!!!! :mad :narutokyu :sasuseal :kkanbu :ban :pwned
     
  20. Bananna why do my pics shrink? DDD:

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    Meh... I've seen the idea before too often. :/ Also, there's a lot of huge block paragraphs that are hard to read and confusing.

    And I doubt that a ninja's profile would list alll their jutsus and techniques. Kabuto did cards, but they weren't detailed enough to totally give away a shinobi's (usually secret) techniques.
     
  21. DemonHiddenInAshes Soon to rule!

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    well duh. They wouldn't be secret other wise.
     
  22. norino hyuuga norue zikuma

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    that was cool!

    smile-big that story was awsome! even though i didn't finish the chapter it was still awsome to make fanfiction about naruto having an older brother!
     
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    Alright, Hey people! Sorry for the huge delays, I've updated like... 4 chapters since Chapter 6. Soon the story will actually include Naruto's brother, or so I hope.

    Also, the ninja profiles only reveal common techniques the ninja knows. They are kept from all Ninja eyes except for the Kage of the village, and those hunting those ninja down if they are Missing Nins.
     
  25. Rotc Girl I'm back ~_~

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    It's nice, but what is the forbidden jutsu?
     
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    A Forbidden Jutsu is a technique forbidden by the Hokage of a village to be used. These techniques either have dire consequences (Such as killing the user), or drain too much Chakra to be useful to those who use it (Kage Bunshin No Jutsu is forbidden because it distributes your chakra evenly among your Clones, but uses alot of chakra to begin with).
     
  27. Rotc Girl I'm back ~_~

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    No, I mean, what was the one that was used?
     
  28. Alaris New Member

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    Well, seeing as i'm generous, you could consider his recent techniques Forbidden. The variation of Chidori he just used could be considered forbidden because it requires the use of the Cursed Seal and massive amounts of chakra to back that up. It likely ends up killing the user.
     
  29. Rotc Girl I'm back ~_~

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    wow thats so awesome
     
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