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FlashFiction Discussion Thread

Discussion in 'Reader's Corner' started by Reznor, Jul 28, 2014.

  1. Lucaniel non serviam

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    ho ho ho

    there's a weird flow to your piece which makes it read like a lecture instead of having dramatic immediacy. stuff like "strategic flight patterns", beginning sentences with "nonetheless", and that weird bit at the end - "in the midst of revolutionised warfare." - all feels awkward, and almost like it's being read from a textbook or one of those commissioned film tie-in novels

    i think you need to simplify your prose and get away from these unwieldy metaphors - "as if to discharge all of God’s fury at the unholy spectacle taking place" - when you're describing a battle scene which, to adequately convey what you want to convey in terms of immediacy, intensity, violence, speed, chaos, etc. requires a different form. shorter, sharper sentences. this: "A signal for target down. A signal for oil. A flexing of a muscle, a mutter of a slogan, a casting of a wand. A blazed trail of dead Tunsmen." is more like it
     
  2. Lucaniel non serviam

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    make like raymond carver and get minimal, bitch
     
  3. afgpride Global Moderator

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    luc flaked so he's automatically gay, astute observation tbh
     
  4. Lucaniel non serviam

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    to be fair tho i've recently read two novels which are slightly imitating 19th-century prose (not enough to be annoying) while being about aerial combat with dragons and they pull off decent battle sequences. i'm talking about the first two temeraire books

    Spoiler: here's one

     
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  5. Lucaniel non serviam

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    afg i think you once told me you don't really read fiction and mostly read nonfiction

    has that changed
     
  6. 2boskov i'm super gay and not powerful Retired Staff

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    if you're not taking at least a thousand words per scene you're doing it wrong
     
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  7. afgpride Global Moderator

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    not yet but it will soon

    i have dune and a box set of asoiaf sitting in my shelf but i'll put both of their fat asses on hold and start barrelling through e-books of shit i'm most interested in reading at that particular moment

    plan on reading both fiction and non fiction every day, but i have to sort out my irl problems enough to free up the time and stress to be able to do it consistently

    something like 25 pages of non fiction, 25 pages of fiction in ideal spots of the day is my goal
     
  8. Lucaniel non serviam

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    lol i wish you hadn't spent money on asoiaf personally but yeah since you read ebooks it all works out

    i've got a shitload of them obvs so tell me if you want any recs or files
     
  9. afgpride Global Moderator

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    nice, i sometimes struggle to find files for lesser known works so i'll come to you first
     
  10. Lucaniel non serviam

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    copied all the file paths in the books folder (top two are subfolders), what's in there is what i got
     
  11. afgpride Global Moderator

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    fuck yes :bury
     
  12. Nighty the Mighty swm n outer space Advisor

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    can u just upload that whole thing @Lucaniel ?

    how big is the folder?
     
  13. Lucaniel non serviam

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    over 1gb
     
  14. Nighty the Mighty swm n outer space Advisor

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  15. Nighty the Mighty swm n outer space Advisor

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    gonna have to save this pastebin and refer to it at a later date I guess
     
  16. Lucaniel non serviam

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    500 of the files are under 1mb each, but the total size gets skewed because of the largest files, some of which are books containing large image illustrations e.g. arcanum unbounded and oathbringer



    10 items, 227 mb

    other 764 files - 863 mb
     
  17. Lucaniel non serviam

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    If I didn't have this autistic hatred of reading on a screen I would be dling all of these
     
  19. Nighty the Mighty swm n outer space Advisor

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    I rate things informative that contain info
     
  20. Lucaniel non serviam

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    do you really think like "that gave me information, i should rate it with the set narutoforums rating for when things are informative"

    i get rating stuff sarcastically or to pass comment eg friendly or optimistic but this... its fucked up. its like how people used to say lol but now they just rate stuff funny instead
     
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  21. Nighty the Mighty swm n outer space Advisor

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    I mean it's mostly a meme

    informative is my go to rating for most posts now cause I mind tricked myself
     
  22. Lucaniel non serviam

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    yeah you gave yourself xenforo autism

    stop doing it
     
  23. MAD we are many

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    e-books arent books books are by definition written or printed pages bound together

    dont submit pasta :camby
     
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  25. Lucaniel non serviam

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    that's why they're called e-books
     
  26. MAD we are many

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    theyre still not real books tho so i disavow calling them that
    just like e-relationships arent real relationships :kermit
     
  27. Parallax Never Forever Retired Staff

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    TELL EM WAF
     
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  28. Lucaniel non serviam

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  29. afgpride Global Moderator

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    >not using the full repertoire of epic cool awesome RATINGS to express your exact emotion for every post with a click of a button
     
  30. MAD we are many

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