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In The Closet *Starring Sakura and Sasuke*

Discussion in 'Naruto Fanworks' started by depression, Jun 1, 2007.

  1. depression

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    ~Hello, I'm Depression
    Characters: I don't own the characters or the company
    The Story: I don't own the story. It was created by Arashi and Tecboy on naruto.forums.com made this.
    Rating: PG-13. For lang. and perverted thoughts
    -----------here we go-----------
    Sakura walked down the empty hall of the Ninja Academy to the Library when she saw someone who looked to be lost.

    "Sasuke-kun?" she asked.

    "What?" he replied coldly.

    "Are you lost?"

    "No."

    "Then why does it look like you're wandering around the halls?"

    "I'm not wandering."

    Sakura walked up to Sasuke and saw that his arm was slightly bleeding.

    "How did you get hurt?" she asked pointing to the cut.

    "None of your business," he replied once again in a cold way, "now go away."

    Sakura looked down, "All right," she said about to walk away.

    However, suddenly someone came out of no where and knocked Sasuke and Sakura into a closet that they were standing in front of and locked the door.

    "Hehe," the person said laughing running away, "this should be interesting."

    "What the fuck is going on?!" shouted Sasuke when he realized what happened.

    "I don't know," said Sakura weakly.

    Now, to let our readers what these two ended up in was the following. It was a small, dark, and crowded with supplies closet. The closet would probably be only big enough for one person to fit, but now Sasuke and Sakura were stuck in it. Then Sasuke started to bang on the door trying to get someone's attention and Sakura started to feel around to try and find a light switch.

    Naruto, Hinata, Ino, and Shikamaru were walking in the hall where the closet was and heard Sasuke's banging on the door.

    "What's that noise?" asked Naruto as he walked over to the closet.

    "Sasuke-kun is that you sweetie?" asked Ino.

    "Yes, it's me! Don't call me sweetie! I'm no one's sweetie!" Sasuke replied angrily, "we're locked in!!"

    "We?" asked Ino.

    "Sakura and I are locked in!" he replied, "let us out!"

    "Sakura's in there?!?!?!" shouted Ino angrily, "get out forehead girl!!"

    "I can't Ino-pig!" shouted Sakura angrily standing up in the closet.

    Inner Sakura: Hahahahahaha!! I'm stuck in a closet with Sasuke-kun!!

    Suddenly as Sakura stood up, a couple of brooms feel on top of Sakura and Sasuke knocking them down and they were on top of each other. a/n: to you perverted people, they were wearing clothes.

    "Shit," said Sasuke when he fell down, but suddenly blushed when he felt Sakura's body on top of his, "Sakura?"

    "Huh?" asked Sakura as she opened her eyes and found herself on Sasuke's body. She blushed.

    Now, we will continue this part from the outside of the closet where Shikamaru, Naruto, Hinata and Ino were listening.

    Sasuke (from under Sakura): "Get off of me!"

    Sakura (under two brooms): "I can't!"

    Sasuke: What do you mean you can't?"

    Sakura (pressing against the brooms): "I'm stuck!"

    Meanwhile,

    "What the hell are they doing in there?!" asked Ino angrily.

    "I don't know, and I don't wanna know," said Shikamaru.

    Sasuke (pushing himself up): "What do you mean you can't?"

    Sakura: "It's too heavy!"

    Sasuke: "What do you mean it's heavy?!"

    "It's too big!" shouted Sakura still trying to get out from under the brooms when suddenly some old erasers with chalk dust fell all over Sakura.

    "What are they doing?!" shouted Ino from the outside.

    "What the hell?!" shouted Sakura looking at the erasers.

    "What happened?" asked Sasuke.

    "I'm covered in white stuff!" shouted Sakura.

    "WHAT?!?!?!" shouted the four others from outside the closet.

    Then, as if almost on cue, blood started to come out of Sasuke's wound.

    "It's blood!!" shouted Sakura when she saw the wound bleeding.

    "Of course it's blood!" shouted Sasuke picking up the eraser, "what's this?"

    "I don't know, I can't see!" shouted Sakura.

    "It feels soft and like cotton," said Sasuke.

    "Oh god..." said Ino looking at Hinata grimacing, "you don't think?"

    "Oh no..."said Hinata also grimacing, "I hope not..."

    "What are you guys talking about?" asked Naruto.

    "Women things," said Ino in a matter-of-fact tone, "you wouldn't understand."

    Shikamaru, figuring it out, "Oh shit, I hope not.."

    "What?" asked Naruto obviously not getting it.

    "Shut up and just listen!" snapped Ino, obviously interested to find out more.

    "The bleeding! It's not stopping!" cried Sakura from inside the closet because the cut on Sasuke just kept bleeding.

    "Well put this there!" shouted Sasuke taking off his shirt to put on the cut. DROOOOLLL!!

    "Why are you giving me your shirt?!" exclaimed Sakura.

    "Put it there on the bleeding!" Sasuke shouted.

    "His shirt?!?! What the fck is going on?!?! Hinata use your Byakugan to look inside!" cried Ino.

    Hinata did some hand seals and looked inside and grimaced but before Ino could ask her anything, she ran away.

    "Dammit!" shouted Ino, "Shikamaru?! Can't you pick the lock?!"

    "No, it's too troublesome," Shikamaru replied.

    Ino bitchsmacked him. Then suddenly Kakashi appeared with a "POOF!"

    "This just went from bad to worse," thought Ino as Kakashi asked what happened.

    "I see," said Kakashi, "well, I guess I don't mind some entertainment."

    "WHAT?!?!?!" shouted Ino, Shikamaru and Naruto.

    Back in the closet Sakura and Sasuke were sitting and then some cleaning fluid fell on Sasuke's cut.

    "OWWW!!" exclaimed Sasuke.

    "What?" cried Sakura worried.

    "It stings!!"

    "What stings?"

    "You know!"

    "What does he mean by that?" asked Ino.

    "I don't know," Kakashi said grinning.

    Ino put her head on Shikamaru's shoulder anxiously.

    "Ok, ok, breathe in and out! In and out!" said Sakura trying to calm down Sasuke who was moaning from the stinging.

    "I can't! It hurts!" Sasuke moaned.

    "Breathe!" Sakura commanded.

    "I can't!" groaned Sasuke, "this is a messy thing!"

    "That's it!" exclaimed Ino, "I'm going in!"

    "Wait," said Kakashi silencing Ino, "I wanna listen more."

    "YOU PERVERT!" shouted Ino attempting to smack Kakashi, but missed and hit Naruto in the head.

    "Ow.." said Naruto rubbing his head.

    "The blood it's going everywhere!" shouted Sakura.

    "Put the shirt there!" Sasuke commanded.

    "I can't see it!" replied Sakura. Then she took the shirt and placed the shirt, a tad bit harshly on the cut.

    "OWW!" shouted Sasuke, "Get off!"

    And with that the two brooms from before fell upon them again and Sakura this time landed with he lips on top of Sasuke's.

    "Oh my god!!" thought Sakura blushing, "I just kissed Sasuke!!"

    "What just happened?" thought Sasuke, "did we just kiss?"

    Then as Sakura attempted to get up, Sasuke pulled her back down into another kiss.

    "EEEEEE!!!" squealed Sakura, "that tickles Sasuke-kun!"

    "What was that?!" asked Ino.

    Little did Ino know that when Sasuke pulled Sakura to kiss her again, he kissed her on her neck. a/n: coincidence? I don't think so.

    Then a janitor heard the commotion and came over to the group.

    "What's going on?!" he asked a tad bit angrily.

    "Two of my students are locked in the closet," said Kakashi calmly while holding down a raging Ino.

    "Is that all? Then why all the commotion?" replied the janitor as he started to open the door. When he opened it, it revealed a shirtless Sasuke, a disheveled Sakura with the chalkdust all over her, and a very messy closet with blood, chalkdust and liquid cleaner all over the place.

    "Sasuke-kun! My love!" shouted Ino as she ran over and grabbed Sasuke in a tight hug. Then she pointed at Sakura, "What the hell happened!?"

    "Huh?" asked a puzzled Sakura. Then she turned around and saw the closet, "Shit," she thought.

    Ino was about to kill Sakura when Shikamaru pulled Ino away. Then Naruto decided to leave to find Hinata as Kakashi left to talk to the janitor. There was then silence.

    "Uh...Sasuke-kun?" asked Sakura nervously breaking the silence.

    "What?" he said.

    "Shouldn't you show that cut to the nurse?"

    "Fine," he replied standing up and offering a hand to help Sakura up.

    Sakura saw the hand offered to her and gave a puzzled look.

    "Are you gonna go with me to the nurse or not?" Sasuke asked a little impatiently.

    Sakura nodded her head and took Sasuke's hand as they walked down the hall.

    "Anno, Sasuke-kun?" Sakura started.

    "What?" he replied.

    "You do know that we could've knocked the door down?"

    Sasuke sweatdropped as he thought about it. He sighed and just said quietly, "No shit." And they continued on their merry way.

    THE END
     
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    Dude this was awesome. espeacailly the part when it showed what the people outside the closet was hearing. Man this was awesome
     
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    Ahhh man noobs and there righting here we go again *sigh*.
    1.Your story lacks a good begginning or a solid middle or a very good ending for that matter.
    2.The charecters are so out of charecter its not even funny.
    3.Its the stupidist idea for a fic ever.
    4.You jump right into the story.
    5.Charecters are doing things for no reason at all i mean for peat,s sake give all the charecters a reason to be there not to just be there.
    6. and to top it all of you dont give much descriptive detail at all.
     
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    A. not my fanfic
    B. thanks for the comments
    345313) uhhh.... YAY!!
     
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    what how do you find this good and if it isnt your fic than whos is it your supposed to post your ideas not other peoples
     
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    Arisha asked me to post this on this website. And its not your good opinion I wish to own. if you don't like this fanfic, then backoff
     
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    What depression said, and We don't care about a good beggining,It was funny and she a newbie,leave her alone
     
  9. Kisara_Momochi

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    Shut up, sen, your a freaking newbie also.

    Oh and there is this anime thingy (like at our library) that is june 26, i'm hoping to go, and wanted to see if you would like to come............ Sorry for taking up other peoples thread to say this


    AND AGAIN........... I LOVE THIS STORY
     
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    no i'm an academy student not a newbie
     
  11. Caitlyn Jenner

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    this Fanfiction sucks so badly, all it was, was people talking, no detail what so ever.

    HyugaNinja can even do better.
     
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    lol


    Stop making fun of Vencent, idiots. I promised not be an ass today, but you are going out of control.

    First off, like Vencet said, where the hell is the beginning, and the ending? Don't even kid with me and said those were it, they were bad my friend.

    Also, why are the characters so out of their personalities? Where the heck is the detailed climax? You kept adding shit after pile of shit, until I was too shitbrained to think, it was bad.

    No offense, but the idea sucked, very badly. I also never knew Sasuke cried over a little cut, lol. Stupid.


    Grammarwise, it was OK, but I do know one thing: It was too damn short. Only 1361 words? This is a oneshot. It'd be good for the first chap of a serious, but a one shot? Try and set a goal for at least 5000 words my friend.


    And yes, you are all n00bs, cept for Weezy Vencet.
     
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    I saw this on naru-..Wait...Not your fic?..Isn't that copyright infrigment or something?
     
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    lol, it was good.
     
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    Sort of got a stiffy when reading it.

    Nice job.
     
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    lol this is funny. oh and she said she got permission to post it so there fore she can well post it.
     
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    Oh my Gosh! This was hysterical! I couldn't stop laughing! It sounded like...well, you know. kakashi seemed like he enjoyed it, Ino was freaking going to kill Sakura. I just had to make sure my mom didn't see. =]
     
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    lol i love this story
     
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    AHAHAHAHA ! I'm sorry I just thought this story was really funny . Heh , I loved it ! :hearts
     
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    I thought it was cute and funny. :nosebleed

    shoulda got some more actual action between Sasuke and Sakura, a little more kissing. :woo
     
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