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Painful Birthday

Discussion in 'Naruto Fanworks' started by Uzumaki Naruto, Oct 11, 2004.

  1. Uzumaki Naruto Hokage

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    Painful Birthday
    By: Uzumaki Naruto
    I do not own Naruto. Sorry for being a day late. I wrote this story on his birthday I am submitting it today.

    Sakura walked down the sidewalks of Konoha and noticed how everyone looked so different. They seemed angry as they walked passed her, and their hands clenched into a tight fist. People seemed sadder and walked with their heads down. As they walked by she heard shouts coming from not to far away.
    ?You little shit! I?ll kill you!? A man said as he was trying to force himself to run towards Naruto. His two friends held him back and Sakura walked over to the fight. Naruto raised his fist in the air and was soon ready to yell at the man until a strong fist knocked him down,
    ?Baka! What do you think you?re doing? Stop annoying people.? Sakura said and then sighed.
    ?But, but, Sakura-Chan?? Naruto tried to explain but Sakura did not give him a chance. Some people began to laugh but still glared at Naruto, wanting to kill him more then ever.
    ?Come on baka, we have to meet Kakashi-sensei today.? Sakura had said and Naruto nodded his head and followed her. People still glared at Naruto and some just began to walk away, and continue on in doing their own business for the day.
    ?Naruto, how can you always get in so much trouble?? Sakura yelled and still gave no chance for Naruto to speak. A chuunnin walked passed her and neither Sakura nor did Naruto notice the evil glare he gave towards Naruto.

    A strong arm grabbed Naruto as the chuunnin passed them by and Naruto turned around to be hit by a strong fist. As Naruto fell down the chuunnin spit at him and walked away.
    ?Naruto! What did you do this time?? Sakura yelled as she witnessed the whole thing. Naruto pulled himself back up and growled, he raced towards the chuunnin to only hit thin air.
    ?Bunshin no jutsu?? Naruto said as he was hit from the back.
    ?You little shit of a demon, you think you can actually hurt me?? As the chuunnin threw another punch towards Naruto, but this time, the punch was directed towards Naruto?s stomach, which took out all the air out of him. Naruto held his stomach and winced in pain. Sakura felt her heart drop as she saw this, the chuunnin wouldn?t stop attacking Naruto. People from the village who witnessed this began to come closer and cheer the chuunnin on. Sakura felt shocked and couldn?t move as she watched the chuunnin beat on Naruto and then others began to join, the chuunnin began letting the village have free hits on Naruto.

    Sakura felt her rage build up after the shock had passed and she began to scream,
    ?Stop it! What are you doing this to him?? She felt scared as people began to stare at her; a couple of men still kept hitting Naruto and ignoring her cry for them to stop. The chuunnin ignored her and kept Naruto held down good so he couldn?t escape. One of the men looked closer at Sakura and noticed that she was the girl that had punched Naruto not to long ago. Then he looked at the others that began to glare at her,
    ?It?s ok, she was beating him earlier, lets finish him. He doesn?t deserve to live.? The man said with a grin. Some people began to cheer and others began to smile. Some laughed happily knowing that the disgrace of the village will soon be deceased. Sakura never had felt so scared and when a arm grabbed her shoulder she froze in shock. This event the people decided to have was horrifying and she did not want to know what the person who had just touched her would do to her.
    ?Sakura, it is ok, it is me Kakashi.? Kakashi said as he glared at the village. He jumped into the middle of the group smashing the chuunnin?s face with his fist and pulling Naruto away. Another hand grabbed Sakura?s shoulder and it was Iruka-sensei. Kakashi jumped back to the group, holding closely to his chest the unconscious Naruto. Sakura was shocked once again when she saw Naruto, there was blood everywhere on his face, arms, and legs. Kakashi held Naruto tightly to his chest, almost afraid to let the little blond go, in fear that if he did, the boy would die.
    ?Iruka-sensei, go get the hokage immediately! Tell her that three chuunnin?s had attacked Naruto and encouraged a portion of the village to join in.? Kakashi said as he began to tend to Naruto?s wounds.
    ?He should be fine for right now???.? Kakashi said as he looked carefully at Naruto. Sakura walked towards Naruto and her eyes began to tear up. Why would people do this to him she thought. Yes he was annoying and stupid, but he did not deserve this. That is all she could think of, as she wanted to just hold Naruto in her arms. Her heart couldn?t stop racing, she had almost lost him to the stupid chuunnin,s and a group of people from the village. Her village, his village, their village had almost tried to kill him! Her mind was racing, she couldn?t stop thinking about the village that he cared for and fought for was trying to kill him!
    ?Sakura, it is ok, he should be fine.? Kakashi said. People began to yell in rage behind them and came closer; the chuunnin that held Naruto to give people free hits was leading them. Kakashi looked at Sakura and raised her chin with his fingures,
    ?Sakura, watch over Naruto for me, when help comes, make sure they take Naruto away from here, they would of followed and maybe even attacked Iruka-sensei before he could of reached Tsunade-sama, so I couldn?t let him take Naruto, it would slow him down and he already has one of the three chuunnin?s chasing him.? Kakashi said as he turned around.
    ?You should feel ashamed for attacking him. He is a ninja of the village, and he is part of the village. You three chuunnin?s will not go unpunished.? Kakashi said and directly to the chuunnin that lead the group. He could easily stop two of the chuunnins, but the one that lead the group was well experienced and trained that he was near jounin level. He would cause Kakashi enough trouble to let the other chunnin and possibly a few people from the village, be able to harm or even kill Naruto, and he could not harm the people of his own village! So he was stuck with very little options and he knew Iruka would be slow downed by the other chuunnin.
    ?Kakashi, you know well enough the demon will die here.? The chuunnin said.
    ?Karasu, you have the skills as a jounin, but you?re still lacking the true spirit of one!? Kakashi said as he glared at Karasu.

    Sakura watched as the village slowly walked behind the chuunnin who lead them. His name was Karasu and his skills as a ninja were jounin level but he did not have the heart and spirit of one, which failed him many times to be a jounin. Sakura began to hold Naruto close to her chest, she didn?t want to let him go, she couldn?t let him go. She pulled a kunai out of her pouch just incase someone had gotten passed Kakashi.
    ?Kage bunshin no jutsu!? Kakashi yelled and many Kakashi?s had come in place ready to stop anyone that would attempt to get passed him. A hand grabed Sakura?s shoulder and she swung her blade viciously at the person.
     
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    AH! Watch where you swing that thing. Gai yelled as he moved away jokingly from her. His face became serious as he watched Kakashi stop people from trying to pass him. He looked down at Naruto who seemed to be healing quickly from the punishment he just endured. Gai knew what had happened,
    Come with me, we will take Naruto with us to meet with the hokage. Gai said seriously and another hand grabed Sakura and she swung her blade once more. It was Lee and he back flipped away from the attack.
    Sakura-chan, its me Rock Lee! Lee said happily as he looked at her. His expression changed quickly and he did not try to win Sakuras heart. He was not to far away from Gai and also observed the situation.
    Oh, Lee, good, help Sakura pick up Naruto and lets go. Gai said but before they had their chance to leave the spot they were in, they found themselves surrounded with more people and more ninjas. They were not just chuunnin this time. There were jounins from place to place. Gai felt his heart drop as it pained him to see that the jounins the highest rank and one of the most trustful nins betray a person from the village who had never done anything truly wrong.
    Oi, Lee, protect Sakura and NarutoI will deal with these disgraces personally. Gai said and Lee shot up quickly and began to watch carefully for anything. Kunais began to fly passed Lee almost hitting Sakura who tried to use her body to block them from hitting Naruto, but they never reached her or touched her. Sakura looked up to see Sasuke holding two of the kunais that were thrown and Neji holding another pair that was thrown. Both boys had their eyes changed to Sharingan and Byuakyen. More kunais were thrown, but this time there were triple the amount then before. Neji and Sasuke stopped a few of them, but the others were to fast for them to catch or even stop. Sakura cuddled Naruto as close as possible to her attempting to block the kunais with her own body once more. They still never came. Asuma and Kurenai stood next to Sasuke and Neji holding the rest of the kunais.
    This is pathetic and disgusting. Kurenai said and Asuma nodded in agreement. Asuma saw Kakashi having some trouble holding the village people as two chunnins attacked. It seemed Kakashi was not having a hard time fighting them; it was just keeping the villagers from escaping his bunshins.
    Kakashi seems to have most things under control Asuma said and Kurenai and him went to help Gai with the fight he was in.

    Haha, Kakashi, you are pathetic, you have become weak. Karasu said. Kakashi just glared and calmly stated back,
    I am not using all my strength. And then he punched Karasu real hard making him fall back and then he kicked the other chuunnin in the stomach and throwing him a fist in the face, knocking that chuunnin completely out of the battle.
    Karasu, if you touch Naruto I will personally kill you myself. Kakashi said harshely and then began fighting once more with Karasu, using all his strength instead of conserving it like he did in the beginning.

    Sakura watched as the battles had become worse, and the gennens were Narutos last line of defense, if the jounins failed to succeed in stopping everyone. Some jounins began leaving Gais side and began attacking Kakashi who was now losing the battle do of more nins attacking at him.
    Kakashi, you shit, let us kill the demon fox! Then everyone can be happy! A villager yelled loud enough so that everyone could here. Peoples rage increased and their determination to kill Naruto increased. Kakashi was sickened more then ever and he pushed back harder then ever.

    Two people began pushing their way through the village and escaped through Kakashis bunshin barrier. They stood right in front of the gennins who had their kunais out. Sasuke and Neji looked carefully at the two and stepped aside with a smile. Lee stood there confused and stood aside. Sakura rocked Naruto in her arms as a tear or two fell upon Naruto. She held him so afraid to let him go. The two people looked at Naruto. Their hearts sadden, and they stared at everyone.
    You people make us sick! They yelled and some stopped fighting to look at them. It was the ramean girl and the raman chief. Some people began to glare at them sickened in how they were helping the blue-eyed blond out.
    How can you support that kyubi? Some yelled at them and Ayuma nor the chief did not look down but looked at the people once more.
    He is a good kid! He works hard and he is a ninja for this village. He loves this village and you, all of you never gave him a chanceyou never let him have a chance to show you who he really is. The girl said and the chief nodded.
    Who is he then? Some yelled. Sakura looked up and people stared at her.
    He is Uzumaki Naruto She said calmly and held him. A strong fist hit the back of her head. A chuunnin snuck through and attempted on hitting Naruto. She held Naruto closely in her arms and the chuunin tried moving her so he could kill Naruto.
    Move you bitch, or I will keep hurting you until you let me kill him or until I kill both of you! He yelled and kept pounding his fist onto her head. She kept blocking every hit then the pounding stopped. Blood escaped her mouth, and reached the ground. She made sure to avoid Naruto as more came out. She then heard a cracking noise. It sounded like a bone being broken, she looked up and saw Tsunade-sama holding the chuunin by the neck squeezing it so he could only breath little amounts of air but still chocking him.
    Dont you ever touch her or Naruto again or I will kill you! She yelled as she squeezed harder and then threw him in the crowed.
    You people make me sick. All chuunnins and jounins who attempted or encouraged this will be punished! She screamed. Peoples heads went down and felt ashamed. Tsunade was angry beyond belief. One man stepped up and looked at her and said,
    How can you support that demonhe killed so many shinobis, so many peoplehow can you support it? He screamed as tears fell from his eyes. Tsunade glared at the man then replied,
    Because, he is Uzumaki Naruto, not the Kyubi that had attacked so long agothis boy had shown more spirit of a ninja then many shinobishe is a true ninja and he loves this village. All you did was attack him for having that demon inside of him. He is not that demon, he is a person a humanjust because we put something inside of him, it doesnt take his humanity away! What is taking his humanity away, his right to live, is the village he loves. She said with emotion, the man looked down feeling more ashamed then ever.
    Everyone return to your homes, except for the chuunnins and jounnins that are here right now. You all will follow me and we will have a little talk about this event. She yelled. People began walking away and the nins started walking towards Tsunade slowly, feeling ashamed.
    I want to speak to Kakashi-sensei first, before we leave. Tsunade said as she walked towards Kakashi.

    Kakashi, I want you to take Naruto, Sakura, and Sasuke out of the village until the next exam. Train them hard, I think the village needs to calm down and learn their lesion from today. I also need to punish these sickly shinobis. She said. Kakashi nodded and walked towards Sakura. She held on to Naruto tightly and then looked straight up at Kakashi.
    Kakashi-senseiwhywhy did they do this to him? Why do they want to kill him? Sakura asked as tears fell from her eyes onto Narutos face. There was a pause and then Kakashi came closer to Sakura.
    Today is Narutos birthday The day the kyubi attacked. The hokage took Naruto as a baby that day and sealed the kyubi in Narutosome believe that now Naruto is that demon fox that had killed so many good shinobi. Kakashi said sadly and then finished off with
    Even ending the life of the 4th hokage. This pinch Kakashis heart as he began to lift Naruto and Sakura slowly began to stand up.
    Sakura, Sasuke, follow me. We are leaving the village for a while. Kakashi said and the three slowly walked away, leaving the village. Tsunade had stopped Kakashi before he left and told him where she would forward money to him. After that, team 7 left the village.

    Night came and they made a fire. Naruto was still sleeping because Tsunade had also put some medicine on him, which would help his healing and let him rest from the hard day. Sakura sat near Naruto, always refusing to stray to far from him. Kakashi had left the group and he had not come back for hours.
     
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    ?He is late?? Sakura said. Sasuke nodded and sat by her. A large smoke puffed in front of them and it was Kakashi.
    ?Sorry I am late?.?Kakashi said and then looked up,
    ?I wanted to make sure everything was perfect.? He said with a slight cheery voice.
    ?For once Kakashi-sensei, I?ll believe you.? Sakura said and Sasuke smiled in return. Kakashi rubbed the back of his head and chuckled a bit. A groan was heard and Naruto?s eyes slowly opened.
    ?Sakura-chan? Sasuke, Kakashi-sensei?? Naruto said he saw them. All three of them smiled.
    ?Happy birthday Naruto.? All of them said and Naruto smiled. Kakashi walked up to Naruto with a cake and Sasuke was to the right of Kakashi and Sakura was to the left.
    ?Hehe, thank you?? Naruto said confused. He had never had a birthday, or even a cake for that matter. Kakashi put the cake down carefully and gave his present to Naruto.
    ?Hehe, what is this?? Naruto asked as he sat up.
    ?It?s a present.? Kakashi said.
    ?What is that Kakashi-sensei?? Naruto asked confused and the three looked at Naruto and sighed with a smile.
    ?It is a gift for your birthday.? Kakashi said knowing Naruto only received gifts, which mainly were from Iruka buying Naruto ramen.
    ?People get gifts for their birthday?? Naruto smiled and cheered, he never thought he would get anything like this on his birthday. Usually his gifts consist of plenty of spits and people shoving him on the street on this day. Kakashi smiled and sighed, he handed Naruto something big and heavy. Naruto opened it to see plenty of weights.
    ?This will help you become stronger and faster.? Kakashi said and Naruto nodded. The second gift was from Sasuke,
    ?Here dobe.? Sasuke said and shoved the gift towards Naruto. Naruto opened it to find a personalized made kunai. Naruto looked at Sasuke confused,
    ?We are friends you dobe, so I got you something.? Was Sasuke?s reply to Naruto. Sakura walked towards Naruto showing him a pot of raman she had made. It was almost done. Naruto jumped up with excitement and couldn?t wait.
    ?I have another present for you Naruto.? She said shyly and Naruto looked at her with confused eyes. She slowly walked up to him; Sasuke smiled and took something out of his pockets as she did so. He whispered something into Kakashi?s ears and Kakashi disappeared. Sakura stood in front of Naruto shyly and then pulled him closer to her. Naruto stepped closer to her confused and then before he knew what happened she pressed her lips against his and kissed him softly. Lights and sparkles surrounded them and a big flash of light surrounded them. It disappeared quickly and then Sakuras slowly moved back from the frozen Naruto.
    ?Happy birthday Naruto-kun.? She said.

    ?Oh, this is a nice picture Sasuke-kun.? Kakashi said as he pointed at the picture Sasuke had taken. There were sparkls of light from behind Naruto and Sakura, which Kakashi had made while Sasuke, took the picture. Sakura ran up and looked at the picture andsmiled, and then realized that Sasuke and Kakashi were going to keep it.
    ?Give me that!? She yelled as she began to chase them while Naruto remained frozen.

    The End

    Happy birthday Naruto!
     
  4. Uzumaki Noriko Tenshikage of Sora.

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    AWWW!!! It was funny at the end, but it was so cool and angsty and OMG!!!
     
  5. Shima Seibyou

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    Very good, I liked it alot.
     
  6. ninja_sakura19 Healing Leaf Ninja! ^.^

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    waaaaii kawaii!! ^_^;; that'll be cool if u did a happy birthday story for Sasuke n Sakura too lol
     
  7. Byakugan New Member

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    this story pwns! its the shiznit!
     
  8. ChristianKO krn kid named Chris

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    hahahah i like it dude!!!! reallt i do!!! :D
     
  10. shadowzero2 Uchiha

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    I really enjoyed this story!
     
  11. Gator I was broken

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    *sniff* I wuv this story! ^_^ lol. good job
     
  13. Uzumaki Naruto Hokage

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    Thank you everyone for reviewing my story. I appreciate that you enjoyed it, I particuly can not believe I was able to write this story and I sometimes enjoy rereading it myself, as if it was not my own.

    I may someday make a Sakura birthday, maybe even a Sasuke birthday, but as of now, I have no more inspiration, and im emotionaly drained.

    Thank you for reading my fic and reviewing, the reviews do mean alot to me.

    P.S. I am working on my oldest fic, Naruto's Agony, it may have a title change.

    I named it a long time ago, I have many chapters up, but I need them to be editied before i start posting them here and on FF.net
     
  14. liminosse Animator for hire

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    wow very nice,... i loved it, sounds like it could be a jump fest 2005 OVA thingy :p i've been looking for a story to draw a fan manga with, mind if i use yours?
     
  15. Uzumaki Naruto Hokage

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    sure, go draw it, but i want to see the pictures to, so pm me the link to the pics when your done ^_^
     
  16. liminosse Animator for hire

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    thanx, i will...thats if i get the chance to do it :)
     
  17. MechaTC Mike, The Genius Penguin

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    I liked the story a lot. I had trouble believing that the shinobi of the village would attack naruto in such a manner that had intention to kill. The reactions of the "good jounen" and hokage should have been more rage filled if these shinobi were trying to kill naruto. having a "little talk" is kinda like a slap on the wrist. They just attempted murder. They should be executed.

    But it was a fanfic, so you have a right to make the story how you want.

    I definitely was pulled into the story. The ending was very nice and made me happy. Good job.
     
  18. pheonixfire New Member

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    That Totally Ruled!!!!!
     
  19. pheonixfire New Member

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    Hope u write more soon!!!!
     
  20. Ichigo_101 School Rumble #54652 fan!

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    :crying this story made me cry.... =/ I love watching and reading story that make me cry ...
    Very nice jop :)
    MORE!!
     
  21. LMP 上海ハーニ★

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    Nothing special IMO, could use some work on descriptions and character developement. I'm not fond of the stiff dialogue either.

    Meh.
     
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    Yeah, cliche plot....character dialog, character depth.....and severe lack of depth/detail.

    When you write something, its like art, you want it to stand out, have a uniformity throughout the story. But keeping to this uniformity, you want a contast between the characters. In this story, if you did put who was talking......i wouldnt know who it was...

    Try to use a wider range of words and conflict...it will really help..
     
  23. kyubinaruto75 Level 99 Monk

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    i like the narusaku theme. but i foudn it really unrealistic that this many chuunin/jounin would attack him like that.
     
  24. cele S-class artist

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    I started reading the first paragraph, and then suddenly, I just finished reading it, now u see how good it is!
     
  26. toddwick pwning since 04/22/88

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    I think you have a very good idea. I'd like to see it developed more, but I'd have to ask if those chunnin could really do that to naruto, especially after the tsunade ark. He was pretty badass after that, definitly on a much higher level than many ninjas regardless of his age or appearance. Kakashi is also one of those "god" characters. I don't think he has a match other than maybe morino ibiki or the hokage.
     
  27. Rayana_Wolfer Rage of a Demon

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    Yeah! Cool! I like the idea of making the other catacthers understand Naruto's pain...
    Yet in my opinion you should find out another reason to make Naruto going down! It's not too much realist making the villagers go after him just after 12 years holding their rage! Apart of that, I liked it too much! (Have you other fanfics to read?)
     
  28. ANBU Sakura The ANBU Sakura Haruno

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    That was very cute! You made me cry it was so mean what they did, that I cried! But the end made me smile, so I like your fanfic!
     
  29. Aternox Rat on Crack

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    Sweet and lovely.^^
    If you want, I can help you with the spelling of Japanese words.
    ^.~
    Huggles.
     
  30. mow <b> <color=red> THE <blink>notlame</blink> AVENGER

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    I share similiar sentiments to Mecha in regards to the shinobi blatantly attacking Naruto, but it you manged to pull it off. On the whole you carried the story well and it certainly draw the reader into. You could work a bit more on your descriptive approach and dialouge, but on the whole, you did a rather good job on it.
     
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