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Discussion in 'Reader's Corner' started by Garson007, Nov 27, 2004.

  1. Garson007 New Member

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    For the latter part of the year I have been experimenting on and off with writing poetry. I wrote something like 5 poems in total (Yes, I know very little). It seems like I have a hidden talent or I am just very lucky, either way I'm satisfied. In any case I wanted to know if anyone else here writes poetry and to post some of your pieces here.

    This is a poem I wrote just now. Unfortunately my plan didn't work to well, so the poem came out sub-par. At the very least it gives an extra bit of experience...

    Unforgivable man

    This is truly an awful guy,
    look at his teeth and eyes.
    Damn he is as ugly as a pig,
    not to mention his form of a fig.

    I hate and despise him,
    nothing he does ties in.
    He doesn’t even work,
    not even the work of a clerk.

    He has no soul,
    no such thing as a goal.
    He starts to cry,
    developing a red eye.

    Why, oh why, oh why?
    He doesn’t look me in the eye.
    This man behind mysterious glass,
    gives me no chance to even pass.


    If this is in any way a success, I'll post some of my older poems here too.(Even one that got published ;) )
     
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  2. Aruka Miss Demeanor™

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    Nobody

    Why, though you are alone you still have the
    courage to satnd tall.
    I envy you, for I have never stood up for my right;
    And I've been doing it for all my life.

    I'm so weak: I'm a dunce, I bet people like you
    make fun of me.
    You are strong, good looking and popular;
    Someone that I could never be.

    I always cry in my own liitle world where noone can
    see my weep away my fears.

    I hate it; I'm just a nobody, a person who is invisble in the eyes of another.
    Someone not worthy of your attention.

    I always look at you from the distance; wishing that we could be friends,
    maybe even more.

    I wanted to be with you, but it's not possible...
     
  3. legan Banned

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    It's a pretty crap one but a lot of emotion went into it.... haven't come up with a title for it either.

    In you I found a friend,
    As it will be untill the end,
    My friendship with you will not wain,
    But a bigger friendship we can gain.

    You've found love,
    For which I'm happy,
    Like a dove,
    You fly so freely.

    While you're soaring,
    Through the sky,
    Don't forget,
    To keep a watcfull eye.

    On all of those,
    That you have met,
    Who will always love you,
    As a dearest Friend.

    Perhaps one day,
    I'll make you proud,
    I'll be a man,
    No longer hiding in the crowd.

    And on the day,
    you will see,
    Me spread my wings,
    And soar so free.

    Up in the sky,
    And through the clouds,
    Just like you,
    Will always do.
     
  4. Garson007 New Member

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    I don't even know if I'm legalised to do this (Well according to the "contract" I signed"), but here is a Poem that a wrote Exclusively for a Book Titled: "The Best Poems and Poets of 2004" - Published by Link removed I don't even know if it was excepted, due to their communication network being almost non existent. In any case I'm just happy they nominated me.

    The Forgiving Tree

    I plucked from you.
    You were not ripe.
    The wrong I did,
    was just not right.

    I came to you.
    To forgive and forget.
    The silence brought me,
    an unforgettable fret.

    I dreamt of you.
    I wished the same.
    The whispering wind around you,
    brought me to bear your name.

    Who are you?
    Who might you be?
    You are my loyal, apple tree.
     
  5. 2OO IQ Guest

    Geez y'all got NOTHING on me.


    Jacking off

    I do it everywhere
    When I aim up it gets in my hair
    When I aim down it gets on the floor
    I can't stand it anymore
    I need to jack off right now
    The places I've done it before
    In my bed on the toilet
    My mom walked in but she could not spoil it
    it's my love, my hobby, my thing
    I can get horny and jack off to anything
    Done it in the dining room
    Done it at my friend's house
    nutted on a broom
    nutted on a couch
    Got a marble kitchen counter and boy is it slippery
    I let it get the best of me
    If the nut is big I scream
    I'm typing with one hand if you know what I mean
    Jacking off, cuz I just gots to
     
  6. 2OO IQ Guest

    give me props yo.
     
  7. naruto_117 It's blank here now

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    You're the next Dr. Seuss.
     
  8. naruto_117 It's blank here now

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    I wrote these two poems a long time ago.


    "What If..."
    Is the glass half empty?​
    Is the glass half full?​
    What if it's both!​
    or what if it isn't?​
    Is the sky the limit,​
    Or is there more?​
    What if there is more!​
    What if there isn't?​
    What if life didn't end?​
    Where would we be?​
    Would we still be at war?​
    Or would we have peace?​
    Life comes and goes,​
    But not was we please!​
    What if we could control death?​
    Since we run our lives, shouldn't we?​

    "Our Love"
    360 miles separate,​
    An inseperable thing.​
    Miles of solid concrete,​
    To divide an invisible thing.​
    An occasional card,​
    To renew a feeling.​
    An occasional gift,​
    To keep her happy.​
    A phone call,​
    When she is sad.​
    Although I may not succeed,​
    I can at least try to cheer her up.​
    I know she would do,​
    The same for me.​
    Because our love is so strong,​
    It can't be beat.​


    That poem was written when I was truly in love with a girl. We just recently broke up but that is still one of my best poems I have ever done.​
     
  9. 2OO IQ Guest

    I am skilled far beyond.
     
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  10. naruto_117 It's blank here now

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    I can relate to some of it but I don't get it in my hair dude and my mom has definitely not walked in on me.
     
  11. Charlie_K Friend of a Legendary Friend

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    200 IQ if you post any more rude or offensive posts then you will be banned again.
     
  12. Lee Taijutsu specialist

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    i am not a poetry person but you should read the ones in bloodloss book
     
  13. 2OO IQ Guest

    I'ma rip your front... lets see if your sites got your BACK
     
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  14. CidVincentNeumann Mechanic

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    200 IQ You have skills in ways I can only wish I had...... I give you all the props in the world!
     
  15. uchiha Femmes Dig Me

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    Lol I've stopped writing poems for months now... mainly because I dont have the mood. I can only write when Im really depressed or down. Which is a good thing since Im overall happy weeeeeeeee~ Here's one of my older poems..

    How Some Live
    Every move I make is a struggle upon a struggle
    Every breath I take is an effort
    Why is it when I just want something there always has to be strings attached
    Something that doesn't work just right
    Constant forks in the road
    I live for the silence
    And I savor the peace
    But there's always something else in the way
    Laughing at me cause it's not totally right
    Nothing ever goes the right way
    What is it about me
    Am I doomed to get shit on for the rest of my life
    I'm bored to death with all this bullshit being fed to me in spoonfuls and mass quantities
    I wish I had just one big huge bullet
    To blow it all away
     
  16. Garson007 New Member

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    It is sometimes in the words that you leave out which hurts the most. Remember that. Half sentences make people think of Worst Case Scenarios. In any case swearing against someone or something they believe in, is hurtful towards that individual.


    Here is the poem that got published, although I myself don't know why, since I believe others I did are better...

    I am, me

    Forever I will be.
    Nothing will change that,
    not even me.

    Even though tides may change,
    there will always be a part of me,
    inside of me, trying it's best
    to really be the whole of me.

    I might seem weird,
    I might seem strange.
    But till the day I die,
    I will be unchanged.

    Accept me who I am, and I will accept you.
    Just don't think, people can't be.
     
  17. Mark b Eat ya For Breakfast

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    My turn... Il drop a rap!!!

    Naruto fam, coz his fighting style is immense to admit
    Coz he fights all his victims, causing them to submit
    An his love for others is great, seems he a coo dude
    But for his childish behaviour, this kid is plain rude
    Techniques are amazing, unrealistic but very cool
    This kids like as a ninja started when he was at skool
    Blood sheared his tears dropped, acting strong felt week
    So don?t fight him? coz he is aggressive, he?ll leave you in defeat


    peace
     
  18. CidVincentNeumann Mechanic

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    *standing ovation* *AND THE CROWD GOES WILD CHHHHHHHHH CCCCHHHHHAAAA* wonderful finish Mark!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
  19. naruto_117 It's blank here now

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    Wurd dawg. :cool:
     
  20. Mark b Eat ya For Breakfast

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    Thanks Ya'll

    Peace
     
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    Fallen - 2003

    Up above the world so high,
    Soaring gaily through the sky,
    Flying together we twist and we turn,
    Down below mere mortals see and yearn.

    Our wings they stretch from side to side,
    Together always the air we ride,
    Suddenly the air is filled with pain,
    All around me they bind with chain.

    Locked away within my pen,
    They say that I am fallen,
    For I have walked upon the land,
    And I have ran upon the sand,
    I have dreamed with mortal kind,
    With mere animals I have dined,
    You yell, you scream and you tear,
    For oh so long we have been so near.

    They say for these crimes I must now pay,
    No mercy for those who stand in their way,
    For friends and family you must agree,
    As you draw your bow you gaze so tenderly.

    Now the arrow tears my side,
    Now there is no place to hide,
    Falling down unto the ground,
    Alone now and forever bound.

    No longer can I fly so high,
    No longer do I course the sky,
    But who has fallen you or me.
    Perhaps one day you will finally see.
     
  22. Aeries Grammar Nazi

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    Currently Untitled

    Crimson is the color of the snow
    But only to those who truly know.
    Know the pain and suffering
    Hear the sleigh bells and screams ringing.

    Ringing. Ringing. All through the night.
    All the while the snow remains white.

    Caught in this dismal and never-ending affair
    The truth hurts your mind like a rocketing flare
    Rejection, abandonment, hatred
    All were forgotten as your throat bled.

    Drip. Drop. Drip. Drop.
    No one can save you now.

    Rain has frozen, blood has dried
    Bitterness has faded but they have lied.
    Stabbed you in the back, my my you're filled with holes!
    But I guess that?s just how life rolls.

    Spiraling down in the endless abyss
    Looks like your time?s running out, huh sis?

    No matter, no heart deserves this pain
    An umbrella I shall hold to shield you from the rain.
    Embraced in wings of illusionary light
    Child, you will be taught the gift of flight.

    Fly. Fly free from that which troubles you
    Float within the sky, the sky so blue.

    The sun is your light at the end of the tunnel
    Never again will you be sucked within this funnel.
    Darkness, anger, troubles to last you a lifetime
    Love shall clear you of your continuous mime.

    Erasing the shadows of your face with the rising of the veil
    Fear not, for love shall forever prevail.


    Blah, I wrote this for a contest. Mind criticing it for me?
     
  23. tigerwoo and the late payment

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    advice for poets:
    if it seems forced, it's not good. so if you rhyme something off like,

    i truly love naruto, man
    i really am the greatest fan
    but if you call me kinda gay
    it's you who is, so eff you anyway

    then you sorta see how the last line is sorta "forced". like it doesn't follow the rythm, but it rhymes. it's like something else should be there but this rhymed so you think it would fit better. whatever. bad example here's a better one

    naruto and sasuke
    they were friends
    they thought they're love
    would never end
    so they put it in a bottle
    and sealed it tight
    and held each other all thru the night

    wait that sounds almost too good. ok a forced line would be like, if it ended with
    so they put it in a bottle
    and sealed it tight
    and the sun, you know, is really bright.

    yeh, there's a better example. it has nothing to do with anything, but it rhymes. maybe it would sell in japan, (look at all the naruto theme's lyrics.... come on...) but whu'eva.

    and in closing, i wrote an english haiku:

    don't tell naruto
    i switched the bottle of pee
    he tried to fool me

    ahahaha, now naruto will drink the pee and i'll get the apple juice! creamy hot! ok. it's not really a haiku, because you can't discern a season from it. this could happen anytime. i'll try again.

    seems like forever
    my fingers are almost sore
    when will this post end

    aw, snot, i forgot the seasonal referrence again. here we go, last time.

    naruto, wake up
    you forgot to feed the cat
    it ate snow and died
     
  24. Aruka Miss Demeanor™

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    Alone

    The wind hussled and the sky was dark.
    Everyone is feeling that there will be none.
    Along with the roads, noone
    came about.
    The place was quiet, that nobody wants.

    She walked within the alleys
    but noone was there.
    She walked a little further to find out that she was lost.
    She ran in her tears, hoping that they will hear.
    But nobody came; 'cause nobody cared.

    She was at a lost, she never came back.
    The memory of her past
    is just awful to bring back.

    Noone dares to ask, 'cause
    it'll be a shame.
    For this girl is now gone,
    and the same with her reality.


    ~Aruka
     
  25. legan Banned

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    Boy I have like 15 poems I could post here but I wont... cos the majority of them suck, as I said that one I posted earlier is the best one I've ever done in my opinion anyway... some others seem to have the notion in their head that I'm good at it.

    Actually here's an example of a poem I did for a friend.

    Lord Tiga's

    He is a Tiga,
    He is our lord,
    He has his own cult,
    And he is their God.

    He is a good Friend,
    Although slightly weird,
    He says he's an idiot,
    And really he is <_<.

    He's easily confused,
    By long words and sentences.
    He's easily amused,
    By Scritchings and huggings.

    He likes to eat fish,
    Large ones or small,
    He really likes egg nog,
    The silly old fool.

    One day I shall fight him,
    And on that day i'll lose,
    Cos Tiga is a warrior,
    And has the bravest of souls.

    I'm glad to have him,
    As one of my Friend's,
    Cos he's always there,
    AND SLEEP IS FOR THE WEAK.
    (There's a long story to explain why i used that at the end)
     
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    roses are red

    violets are blue

    soldiers salute

    i luv my bf

    he,s so cute


    :p
     
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    ?_? Uh oh she said fuck.
     
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    not a good poet but at least it's good to see the talent of others compensates for it, ya?
     
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    starts giving HAUNTER a PM bomb :p
     
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    Tigerwoo, I understand completely. Rhyming is not important enough to mess up your poem. I know I normally have a problem with letting the last line rhyme. The thing is no line should be forced and unfortunately I'm bad at breaking that barrier. I'm still trying to find a balance, but that comes with experience.
     
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