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Discussion in 'Naruto Fanworks' started by Mushroom-Chan, Oct 27, 2006.

  1. Mushroom-Chan

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    Yep sp first chappie of story 4 up so... *in monotone voice* weeeeeee:oh
    This is supposed to be a bit lighter than the other ones...

    Find Yourself

    Miyoko sat on the edge of a cliff eating a rice ball. She had been travelling through a mountain passes for a week. And I still haven?t gotten anywhere. Its just detour after detour. Miyoko stuffed the last bit of rice ball in her mouth and flung her pack over her back.
    ?Well I?ll just keep drifting along,? Miyoko said to herself. Miyoko looked at the other side of the cliff. I could jump? But I?m so high up? Ahhh I?ll jump. Miyoko backed up a few yards then made a mad dash to the edge of the cliff. At the edge of the cliff she leaped to the other side and landed at the edge of the other cliff.
    Miyoko had a large smile on her face ?I?m not dead,? she yelled happily. Miyoko got up from off the ground and brushed herself off.
    She ran in the direction of were a town was supposed to be. After thirty minutes of running Miyoko stopped breathing hard. I should have been there fifteen minutes ago?. Miyoko looked up and realized a city was above her. Oh, no wonder why they called it the City in the Sky?..
     
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    It's here! It's here!! Mushroom-Chan! You made it! Make this thread longer. Also, you should also make the other one longer as well. Anyway, I really like how this sounds. Great names! How do you come up with them?
     
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    Ehhh................. >.< They just come to me... I put Mi-Yo-Ko together ad thats how I got that name. I have a small Hira-Gana sheet so that helps to. I'm gonna make this longer. Next chappie will be longer I promise.
     
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    Okay, I really like it. If you were to add more detail, it would kick even more ass than before, and it still kicks alot of ass!
     
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    ^.^ Thankies! I'l try to put more detail in the next chappie!
     
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    WOW MUSHROOM CHAN YOU MADE A FANFIC!!!????COOL!!!!!*sugar rush calms down...* ill....keep reading........*falls asleep*
     
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    O.O *Gos red from embarassment* Ehhe! I don't think any of my fics are all that great...
     
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    Don't say that. Your FanFics are awesome, just add more detail, and battle scenes!
     
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    Yeah, they really are awesome! Keep me pretty anxious for updates.
     
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    Thank you everyone! There is a battle scene coming up so.......
     
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    OH DARN IT!! WRITERS BLOCK SUXS!
     
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    Ahh, Mushroom-chan, I like this one the best! The title drew me in. But I love the way you write. Good job!!
     
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    Thankies! ^.^ All the peoples R@Ring make me so happy!
     
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    Your writing is awesome. However, if you can make it longer, that wouldb be great. Also, the other cool FanFic you made......... I forgot the name, you should make it longer. The mods might get mad for a waste of space. I know I made a couple of flaws lke that. But your writing rocks, Mushroom-Chan.
     
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    I don't mean for it to be..
     
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