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Your Naruto Fanfic Pet Peeves...

Discussion in 'Naruto Fanworks' started by TekJounin, Jan 21, 2005.

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  1. TekJounin Crackhead Jounin

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    That's always a possibility and I do allow for it. Some authors are thoughtful enough to update when catastrophic moments keep them from being active.

    I think the idea was more for the authors who habitually don't update and leave readers hanging, then come back months later with "Oh, sorry, sorry, sorry. I was backpacking on the steppes and met a real Mongol, lol, and it was so crazy cuz then I went to Peru and rode a llama, so sors again and I will try to find out where I left off or if I even feel like finishing this. I just such a different person, now that I'm an honorary member of the Lake Titicaca Ladies Club and Bowling Team. If I get time before I head out to scuba dive the Marianas Trench, that is."
     
  2. taydev Active Member

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    Oh ok :laugh
     
  3. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    I haven't updated since Janurary, but I don't feel bad...I'm working on it anyways, it's just going slow thanks to school, what can I do?

    Which is kinda why I hate ppl who bitch about authors not updating quicker; grades are more important than something you do as a hobby, just saying. It's not like writing fanfic will get you a good job as a writer most likely because you do suck and people who rev are teens with no sense of actual taste. That's my two cents anyways...

    Just wrote him a scathing yet hopefully helpful review. You just need to be harsh with people like this, maybe this one will turn around.
     
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  4. Dejablue Active Member

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    When OC's are used...what are some of the most over used or over popular names?
     
  5. Tomcat171 The NaruIno Fapping

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    I have a very specific peeve surrounding Mei Terumi characterisation.

    I've seen her portrayed as such (not all in the same fic, mind you):

    Childish
    Quick to act on impulse with little forethought
    Giddish and nervous

    She is none of these things. She's in her 30's (I think), she's not a schoolgirl, and she acts with a (general) maturity that any Kage would. Of course, she has her moments of threatening Ao, which is akin to A's temper and Tsunade's drinking, but that's because he sets her up for it.

    Also, and this is what annoys me the most, is that a lot of writers now place the 'shut up or I'll kill you' phrase whenever Ao so much as talks. It give off the wrong idea about her character, and makes the reader think Mei hates him just for the sake of it, which is far from the case.

    On another note:



    To summarise it for those who don't want to read it (and I seriously advise you do not for the sake of your own sanity):

    Start of fic: The characters to be paired aren't aware of the other's existence.

    Middle of fic (which appears to be barely an hour after the start): "I suddenly feel attracted to this person and jealous of any member of the opposite sex who interacts with them."

    End of fic (five months after the middle, since the author has no intelligence with which to develop a realistic relationship): SEX.

    All of that takes place in a single 2000-word chapter.

    I actually want to reach through my laptop monitor and strangle the cesspit-borne figure who wrote (read: shat) this.
     
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  6. SaishuSoda Sir

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    That's not a 'story', that's an abomination.

    To make it even worse the entire thing was told through bland dialogue. Which basically sums up to this;

    Samui: So you're my future husband?

    Naruto: Yup.

    Samui: That's cool, and for some reason I totally wanna fuck you right now.

    Naruto: Yup, me too. Come back to my place?

    Samui: Kay' as long as you promise to stay faithful.

    Naruto: Believe it!

    --------5 month time-skip-------------

    *BADLY WRITTEN LEMON*

    THE END.
     
  7. Tomcat171 The NaruIno Fapping

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    Inorite? I have since left a harsh review.
     
  8. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    LOOL some dipshit tried to attack my review. Idiot obviously doesn't now what the fuck they are talking about. AHhahahahahaaa! What retards...

    That guy Whirlpool posted about sent me a PM. It's so fucking funny. OMG! His attempt at making fun of me is just.:facepalm :facepalm

    Spoiler:
    A response to your review at

    Umm... you do know where you can shove all your advices, right? Tell me if you don't for I will be extremely glad to explain in details.
    Oh, and I'll gladly tell you something as well. My story is abomination you think? Well, IT DOESN'T MATTER WHAT YOU THINK! Haha, yeah I love the catchphrase... Anyway from what yo said in your review I concluded that you have never, AND DARTHEMIUS MEANS NEVER EVER done it with a girl. So I think you should really get rid of all your pornographic journals. Seriously, do it for your own good and the good of us who just want for all gays and imbeciles like you to remove yourself from our presence. Yeah, and take a break for a couple of weeks, stop watching anime, get out of your house, hook up with some girls, drink some alcohol and try insulting me again for you're not doing a very good job at it.
    P.S. Thanks for writing that. Yeah, I'm grateful, really... For I kind of showed your review to my friends and some of my fans. They were all laughing like crazy, especially on that 'original Naruto is better' crap. Hell, I laughed for hours myself.
    P.P.S. Hey, you should also read my other story! There I made Naruto an invincible maniac/sex machine! You would like it for sure!

    Cheers!

    Darthemius.
     
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  9. Whirlpool Triumvir

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    wow...

    what a douche

    I mean, i enjoy a pimp Naruto as much as the next guy, but this guy overdoes it and is arrogant about it :facepalm
     
  10. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    I know and he also hates gay people. What did they ever do to him? :wth Let me tell you, my reply was just as harsh...It has much crude language, you have been warned.

    Spoiler:
    How old are you again? Because you have the maturity of a fetus. Second of all I'm a woman and straight thanks so much, dipshit. Whatever, if you don't want to take my advice I'm done with you, you cunt sucking leech. And let me guess; all you 'friends' are the anonymous reviewers who are actually you in disguise? Number of reviews doesn't mean jack shit. First of all, if your reviewers don't have the balls to come out and say how shitty your fic is in the first place. Your English is horrible, I seriously had to read over your sad attempt at insults five times before I could get a gist of any of what you said. Nice attempt at trolling, but you REALLY need to do better than that if you think you hurt me at all. And thirdly, I don't own any porno materials, unlike you who probably masturbates to loli children while writing this semen in your mother's basement. Have luck with your garbage and if you think you can do batter job than Kishimoto who is on deadline,s has a family with kids that he must support and works for seven days a week making little for a famous mangaka, then show me. Else, you accusations are nothing more than thin air. You should try to be more open minded to other opinions, more so when we know more than you. Let's just say I"m not the only one who thinks your story is a pile of shit, dearie, and am telling you to give up before you commit suicide after you get more review that DOESN'T inflate your tiny dick.


    Seriously, it is too fun dealing with these spitwads. OMG, I can't breathe...
     
  11. Dejablue Active Member

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    he sounds like a douche and is probably an idiot.
     
  12. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    That's why 'debating' with him is so stimulating. :hurr I mean, seriously?
     
  13. Whirlpool Triumvir

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    He hates gays?

    I'm sort of gay, only for the two in the middle



    and John Stamos....and Jared Leto....

    :maybe
     
  14. Baby Joe Just as planned.

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    Crossovers. Especially the Kingdom Hearts x Naruto ones....:giogio
     
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  15. Blazing CobaltX Yuri Trainer on Fire

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    I also despise fics wherein everybody is paired up with a canonical character, just what the fuck.

    I feel like banging my head to the nearest wall when I think back to when I was reading that.

    Apparently everybody had to have some kind of special Sage Mode ability, even Chouji has Sage Mode. :facepalm

    Oh and:
    "You guys are just level 4, we are like level 100 and you are just like weak dipshits and we are supernatural deities that were send to protect the world. And we are twins!" :giogio
    I think s/he has a furry obsession. :giogio
     
  16. SaishuSoda Sir

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    LOL. :lmao

    It can't get anymore stereotypical than that for an 'internet stud/badass'.

     
  17. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    He sent me another one, just as retarded as the first.

    You're a woman?! Shit, that explains everything! You probably watched all of Twilight series as well...
    Oh, never mind me then, I don't like arguing with women. And yeah, my English may be horrible (Since I'm Russian and all) but yeah, I think I can do 'batter' than Kishimoto. You know why?! Because he made Naruto too good. It's like watching WWE where Cena never turns heel no matter what. Besides, Kishimoto is not working alone. He started alone, yes. Now he has a whole team backing him up.
    As for your question, I'm 23. And no, I don't masturbate, especially on children. By the way, what's loli children? (Yeah, don't forget I'm Russian)
    And my friends are not me in disguise. It was just funny how you trashed my story with the only argument being "Naruto is not like in manga! He should be good!" Well, let me tell you something. This shit is called a fiction for a reason. Hey, some people make Naruto gay! And some even change his gender! Do you trash them as well because of that? I mean come on, all you said was something like "Drop this story because it's bad" or something. You suggested nothing! At least you could say what you don't like so much, like some plot twists or maybe my grammar skills (Yeah, I got trashed about later a lot) Instead you said to just drop it. Well, thanks but no thanks, sis. I think I will keep this story exactly where it is. Besides, I'm not really into listening others' opinion even if you were to know more than I. And if you... and whoever else you know don't like my story so much, there is that one button in the high right corner of your monitor (It has a cross mark on it) Press on this button and my story will disappear. You're welcome.
    P.S. My dick is actually quite large. At least no woman ever complained.
    Cheers.

    Like I care about the size of your dick you disgusting animal.

    Yeah I can see how you'd go gay for those two. :hurr
     
  18. Whirlpool Triumvir

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    Not just the actors the characters too....it's Spartacus and Gannicus, fucking badasses :gar
     
  19. Whirlpool Triumvir

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    Read is other fic....

    :D:
     
  20. Tomcat171 The NaruIno Fapping

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    People who brag like this are physically in the opposite state most of the time.

    I mean, I can be a right asshole when it comes to responding to pissy reviewers. I've already made three people vow to never read any more of my material because I either a) subtly insulted them or b) stated that no amount of pleading would make me change the pairing to their fanfaggotry. Guess what pairing they were effectively demanding me to change an NS fic to?

    Hint: It's got something to do with Naruto and Hinata.

    I always have peeves about what authors write, but I also have severe peeves about what shit reviewers often think they can get away with. Naturally, I wouldn't dish out critique that I don't think I could personally take, but the things some people write are just unfounded shit that deserve harsh responses.
     
  21. Whirlpool Triumvir

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    NaruHina....

    :D:
     
  22. Blazing CobaltX Yuri Trainer on Fire

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  23. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    I don't mind any Narupair as long as it's done well, but who are we kidding?

    Fuck here he goes AGAIN.

    Spoiler: my post he was referring ot
    For your info twilight is the most disgusting garbage ever and if I could find that idiot I'd kill her right then and there. And I LOVE how you stick to stereotypes, and saying "oh thtst expln everything DOH!" like you think you me. I personally don't like fics where Naruto is gay either but that's why I don't read them. I was recommended your fic by someone who obviously did not have much in the way of taste. Trust me, i did click off as soon as =a wrote my review. Again, the premise is good but the execution is flat and uninteresting. I don't mind AU's as I do them myself and they are nice change of pace, but when you do ti wrong...

    Here's what I mean when I say your fic is bad:

    Take your fic; there is no build up, the dialouge is as awkward as hell and that's not because of your bad English, it's just bad dialouge. I do understand that you want Naruto to be dark and not as sunny like he is in the manga but shoving it in our faces in the first chapter is not a good way to do it. Having him be beating by villagers has been used 22432048320948 times and gets boring after a while, try to think of something else. And why would Mikoto take Naruto in? she is a nice person, but the Uchiha have been persecuted by the villagers since the Nine Tails attack, so I don't think she's going to go "Oh, you poor thing. I'll feed you and train you and take you to school." Even if she did, Sasuke's Dad would probably not let her do so as he is head of the Uchiha and wouldn't want them under suspicion.

    I mean think about it for a moment; the facts as they are presented in the story you are writing and the the way that author has portrayed the characters does not match up. It makes it look like you know nothing about the source material; like you are ignorant and just writing to get hits.

    That's all I have for characters. One other thing you need to touch on is how you portray the story. We, as readers do not want to see this:

    "I am running through the forest."

    "Damn, suddenly I am hit by ninjas,"

    Or something like that; it's called 'script-form' and makes the fic look bad to people who want to give it a shot. A better way would be this:

    He is running through the forest, the scent of the trees in his nose and the wind caress his cheek. Out of the periphery of his vision he watches as three shuriken come flying at him from the left. Quickly the raises his hand and deflect the projectiles with the gauntlet on his arm, hearing the clink of metal on metal...

    See, now doesn't that seem more exciting than just dialouge?


    Umm... No. What you described is the exact way a woman should write and I agree with that. For example, a woman would write something like: "A ray of morning sun caressed her cheek, making her woke up from her peaceful slumber. She unwillingly removed herself from her bed's warmth and blah, blah, blah..."
    I would write something like: "She woke up, got out of bed and went out." Yeah, it might not be as pretty as your version, but it's much faster. Besides, many people like my writing because I skipped empty descriptions. For me it's about action. I may write it much simpler, but I try to keep people excited (Yeah, we have different definition of excitement)
    And finally, stop saying I'm ignorant and all that crap! I know pretty well how characters were in manga/anime. That is EXACTLY why I made them different! Please explain to me with your almighty knowledge, what is the point of making a FICTION where everything is exactly like in the manga?! Yeah, I admit I might not be the most original guy, but at least I try. Hell, I saw you wrote some stories too. No, I didn't read them. Perhaps I would've find your stories boring, dumb, or something like that. But I'm not gonna write to you and describe it all in detail. You know why? Because I don't believe it will do any good. I mean yeah, some well placed advice? Sure. In fact, many people asked ME for advice on their stories. But not your kind of advice (Drop it, remember?)
    So how about we just drop it? You don't like me and I... Well, I don't actually know you to say I don't like you, and I can't dislike you simply for hating my story. So, how about it?

    I can't get though to this lout no matter who much I may try.
     
  24. Tomcat171 The NaruIno Fapping

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    Okay...somebody has directly copied what was written in these quotes and actually posted them as an anonymous review to the same story.


    Why bother? I figured my words would probably be enough for the matter.
     
  25. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    why is that a bad thing? I did that just to see what they would say. I was bored and needed to vent and that piece of shit made me go over the edge.
     
  26. Tomcat171 The NaruIno Fapping

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    That was you? :lmao

    I suppose having a second opinion means the first 'critique-heavy' review wasn't just a one-off in the writer's eyes. I never said it was bad thing, I just didn't think it was totally necessary.
     
  27. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    I want to make someone feel so bad they delete their fic. Dunno why; I have a mean streak going on lately, and this thread does not help. :pek
     
  28. SaishuSoda Sir

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    Well, that's rather interesting. It is a little over the top to use our posts like that, out of context.

    Oh well, it hardly even matters anymore. What's done is done.

    I shall cleanse this hatred you bear in your heart.
     
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  29. Kakashifan727 Proud Kakashi fan.

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    The tag is being retarded and nothing is coming up.
     
  30. SaishuSoda Sir

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    Wow, the gif got deleted from the source 3 mins after I posted. Shit, I wasn't prepared for this. :notrust

    Here's some comic relief to... ya know, cleanse the hatred from your heart.

    To keep my post on-topic;

    People killing off the opposition to the main pairing. I ran into this pretty much every fanfic I tried reading today. I don't mind character deaths, but its annoying when its out of spite.

    Killing off Naruto, so Sakura's feelings are completely focused on Sasuke.

    Killing off Ino, so Shikamaru is completely focused on Temari.

    Turning Hinata into a whore, make her completely unlikeable, then kill her off in the shittiest fashion. All to take her out of the 'competition' for Naruto.
     
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